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I have taught algebra and geometry at a public high school here in Columbus since September of 1977, which makes this my twenty-third first day of school. I am not a poet by training. I took the one required English course in college and got a B.
About six years ago a student teacher left a paperback of poems on my desk, and in it was a villanelle, nineteen lines with two of them repeating over and over, and I sat at my desk during my free period and worked out the pattern on graph paper the way I would work out a sequence. Then I tried to write one. It was terrible. I tried again. That was the end of my free periods.
The old fixed forms give me the same pleasure as a proof. You are handed certain things and you may not change them. You must get from the givens to something true, using only legal moves, and when it works, you feel the click. Free verse is a fine thing and I admire people who can do it, but for me it is like being handed a blank sheet and told to "do some math." I need the givens.
So here, one form to a section, is how each one works, written out the way I would put it on the board, and one of my own. My subjects are not exciting. I grade papers, I shovel snow, I grew up in my father's hardware store, and the clock in my classroom is broken. You work with what you're given. That's rather the point.
§1. The Villanelle
GIVEN: 19 lines.
5 tercets (3-line stanzas), then 1 quatrain.
Only 2 rhyme sounds in the whole poem. Call them a and b.
2 refrains: line 1 (call it A1) and line 3 (A2).
Both refrains rhyme on a.
PATTERN:
A1 b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1
a b A2
a b A1 A2
COUNT: A1 appears 4 times (lines 1, 6, 12, 18).
A2 appears 4 times (lines 3, 9, 15, 19).
That leaves 11 lines you actually write.
TO SHOW: that saying the same two things over and over
can mean something different each time.
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The form as we have it comes, oddly enough, from one French poem written around 1600, which later writers took as the model and turned into rules. The trick is that the two refrains have to be written first, and they have to be good enough, and flexible enough, to survive being said four times in four different places. Everything else bends around them. The rhyme on b is the hard part in English: you need six words that rhyme with each other and don't sound like you went looking for them. (You did. The reader shouldn't know that.) Since a refrain has to carry the most weight, I write mine on an index card and carry it in my shirt pocket for a week before I start.
The letters on the left are the scheme, so you can check my work.
The Clock in Room 114
| A1 | The clock above the door stopped late one night |
| b | in March of '94 at ten past four. |
| A2 | Twice every day, at least, the thing is right. |
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| a | I filed the form, in triplicate, polite. |
| b | A man came with a ladder, looked, and swore. |
| A1 | The clock above the door stopped late one night. |
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| a | My students check it, mid-exam, in fright, |
| b | then laugh. It's always ten past four. What's more, |
| A2 | twice every day, at least, the thing is right. |
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| a | I've grown to like it. What we prove, despite |
| b | the bells, holds true. That's what the room is for. |
| A1 | The clock above the door stopped late one night. |
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| a | A proof, once done, is done in black and white, |
| b | in any year, on any distant shore. |
| A2 | Twice every day, at least, the thing is right. |
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| a | Some August they will fix it, out of sight. |
| b | I'll stand beneath it, staring, as before: |
| A1 | the clock above the door stopped late one night; |
| A2 | twice every day, at least, the thing is right. |
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Check: a-rhymes night, right, polite, fright, despite, white, sight. b-rhymes four, swore, more, for, shore, before, six of them, no word used twice. I did use "four" only once as a rhyme, which took most of a Saturday. The clock really is in Room 114, it really did stop in March of 1994, and the work order really is still open. I check every September.
§2. The Sestina
GIVEN: 39 lines.
6 stanzas of 6 lines, then a 3-line envoi.
No rhyme required.
Instead: 6 END-WORDS, chosen in advance.
Every line ends on one of them.
RULE: Number the end-words of stanza 1 as 1 through 6.
Each new stanza takes the end-words of the one
before it in the order 6-1-5-2-4-3.
ENVOI: All 6 words in 3 lines, 2 to a line:
2 & 5, then 4 & 3, then 6 & 1.
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The sestina was invented by a troubadour named Arnaut Daniel in the twelfth century, and I like to think he was a math teacher at heart, because the rule is a permutation. Take the last word, then the first, then the next-to-last, then the second, and so on, folding the list in from both ends. Here is what that does over six stanzas:
| stanza | end-words, lines 1 to 6 |
| I | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 |
| II | 6 | 1 | 5 | 2 | 4 | 3 |
| III | 3 | 6 | 4 | 1 | 2 | 5 |
| IV | 5 | 3 | 2 | 6 | 1 | 4 |
| V | 4 | 5 | 1 | 3 | 6 | 2 |
| VI | 2 | 4 | 6 | 5 | 3 | 1 |
1 = nails 2 = drawer 3 = bell 4 = count 5 = change 6 = hands
Read down any column and every number appears exactly once, so each word gets one turn in each position. Apply the rule a seventh time and you are back to 1-2-3-4-5-6, which is why there are six stanzas and not seven: the permutation has order six. I showed this to my Algebra II class last spring and two of them were interested, which is two more than usual. Notice also that the last word of each stanza is always the first word of the next. That is where the poem gets its feeling of circling something it can't quite put down.
Choosing the six words is most of the work. Pick words with more than one meaning ("change," "count") and you'll have room to move. Pick "parabola" and you won't. I learned that one the hard way.
My father ran a hardware store in a small town north of here from 1946 until 1987, when the big store opened out by the interstate. He died in 1993. I worked the counter every Saturday from the time I was nine.
Baden Hardware
My father sold them loose, the tenpenny nails,
by the pound, off a scale beside the cash drawer,
and every time the door swung, a brass bell
above it rang. That's where I learned to count:
that counter, Saturdays at eight, making change
the old way, coins first, into strangers' hands.
"You count up, not down," he said, and took my hands
and filled them, quarters, dimes. The bitten nails
of his thumbs tapped each bill: "and this is your change,
a dollar ninety, two, and three, and five." The drawer
shut with its small cough. "Now you." I'd count
it out for the next one. The door. The bell.
He never fixed the crack along that bell.
He fixed most everything else. Those hands
could talk a kitchen clock back to its count,
rehang a screen door with two finishing nails,
and find the one right washer in a drawer
of ten thousand washers. He did not like change.
The town did. That was what we called the change:
the lot out by the interstate, no bell,
just doors that opened by themselves. The drawer
was lighter every Saturday. His hands
sorted what didn't need it, finishing nails
from common, eightpenny from ten, a careful count
of things that no one came to buy. I lost count
of Saturdays he stood there. Nothing would change
his mind, until it did. We sold the nails
by the keg to a builder. No one wanted the bell.
He took it down himself. It rode home in his hands
in a paper sack, and went into a drawer.
It lives now in my own top desk drawer
in Room 114. When they learn to count
by proof, from what is given, my hands
remember counting up from price to change.
Some test days I almost ring the bell.
I hold the clapper still. It's cold as nails.
There's no money in that drawer, and no change,
just what he'd count as worth the keeping: a bell
that fits my hands, and weighs a pound, like nails.
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Check: 39 lines. Stanza endings, in order: 1-2-3-4-5-6, 6-1-5-2-4-3, 3-6-4-1-2-5, 5-3-2-6-1-4, 4-5-1-3-6-2, 2-4-6-5-3-1. Envoi: drawer and change, count and bell, hands and nails. I went over it with a ruler. If you find a mistake, I will give you extra credit.
§3. The Pantoum
GIVEN: Any number of quatrains (4-line stanzas).
RULE: Lines 2 and 4 of each stanza become
lines 1 and 3 of the next.
CLOSE: In the last stanza, lines 2 and 4 are
lines 3 and 1 of the FIRST stanza,
so the poem ends on the line it began with.
SCHEME (5 stanzas):
A B C D
B E D F
E G F H
G I H J
I C J A
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The pantoum comes from the Malay pantun, by way of some nineteenth-century French poets who admired it. Every line but the first two and the last two gets said twice, so the poem moves forward two steps and back one, like a person walking through deep snow. Which is why I used it for a snow day. Rhyme is optional; I left it out. Small changes in punctuation are allowed when a line comes back, and you'll see I took a few, but the words stay the same.
Snow Day
The radio read our district's name at six.
I heard it twice to make sure I was right.
Outside, the street had lost its edges overnight.
Nobody in this house will grade a thing today.
I heard it twice to make sure I was right.
I stood there in my socks like I was ten.
Nobody in this house will grade a thing today.
The papers on the table can stay a stack.
I stood there in my socks like I was ten.
Deb laughed at me and made the second pot.
The papers on the table can stay a stack;
the quadratic formula will keep.
Deb laughed at me and made the second pot.
The neighbor's kids went by, dragging their sleds.
The quadratic formula will keep.
I shoveled our walk, and then I shoveled theirs.
The neighbor's kids went by, dragging their sleds.
Outside, the street had lost its edges overnight.
I shoveled our walk, and then I shoveled theirs.
The radio read our district's name at six.
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Check: 20 lines, 10 different ones, every one of them used exactly twice. (Deb is my wife. She approves of this poem because she comes off well in it.)
§4. The Ghazal
GIVEN: 5 or more couplets.
Each couplet complete in itself.
RULE: A REFRAIN (a word or phrase) ends BOTH lines
of the first couplet, and the SECOND line
of every couplet after it.
Just before the refrain, a RHYME, which
changes from couplet to couplet.
CLOSE: The poet puts his own name in the last
couplet, often talking to himself.
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This is the oldest form on the page and the one I understand least, so I say so up front. The ghazal began in Arabic and was carried to its height in Persian, by Hafez in the 1300s, and in Urdu, by Ghalib in the 1800s. The couplets are like beads on a string: each one is its own small thing, and the refrain is the string. They don't have to tell a story in order. That was hard for me. My instinct is to make line 2 follow from line 1, and couplet 3 from couplet 2, like the steps of a proof. The ghazal wants you to stop doing that and trust that the string will hold them together.
Here the refrain is "at this table," and the rhyme just before it is eight, wait, calculate, straight, celebrate, hesitate, late. The table is the kitchen table, which was my father's, and the time of year is any Sunday night from September to June.
Ghazal for a Sunday Night
A hundred and twelve quizzes, and it's ten past eight at this table.
Deb went up with a book. The red pens and I wait at this table.
My father did the store's books here, the long columns, month by month.
He carried the ones with his tongue between his teeth. So do I, when I calculate at this table.
Number six: one boy has drawn a dog where the graph should go.
I give him a point for the axes. The dog sits up straight at this table.
Here's one who got them all, and showed his work, and wrote "thanks, Mr. B."
I don't know what to do with that. I sit a while and celebrate at this table.
One failed again, the third time. I write "See me," not the number.
Some numbers are true and still not kind. I hesitate at this table.
Morris, in twenty years they won't remember one of these.
They might remember someone stayed up late at this table.
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Check: 6 couplets, refrain in lines 1, 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 and 12, a new rhyme each time, name in the last couplet. People who really know the form will say my lines are too long and too plain. They are probably right. I'll keep trying.
§5. The Triolet
GIVEN: 8 lines. 2 rhyme sounds.
SCHEME: A B a A a b A B
(capital letter = a repeated line)
COUNT: Line 1 appears 3 times (lines 1, 4, 7).
Line 2 appears twice (lines 2, 8).
5 of the 8 lines are repeats.
You write 3 new lines. That's all.
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A medieval French form, and the most efficient poem ever devised: eight lines, three of them new. I have suggested to our guidance department that it be required. The difficulty is that line 1 has to mean something slightly different each of the three times you hear it, or the reader will feel cheated. A question works well for this, because the answer can change.
Hall Pass
| A | I let him take the hall pass. Why? |
| B | The kid needs eight minutes alone. |
| a | He's not in trouble. He's not shy. |
| A | I let him take the hall pass. Why? |
| a | Because, at fifteen, so did I, |
| b | and walked the long way, on my own. |
| A | I let him take the hall pass. Why? |
| B | The kid needs eight minutes alone. |
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§6. More Attempts
The ones above are the ones I'm least embarrassed by. There's a second page with a few others: a triolet about chalk, a pantoum about Open House night, and a cinquain, which is the shortest form I'll admit to, plus the story of the sestina I gave up on.
§7. What About Sonnets?
People write to ask why there are no sonnets here. The honest answer is that the sonnet is the one fixed form everyone already knows, and I'd rather spend my evenings on the odd ones. The other honest answer is that my meter is not good enough yet. If you want sonnets, go to The Sonnet Workshop, where a retired professor explains how the form is built, walks through Shakespeare's Sonnet 18 line by line, and gives you homework. I did the homework. I'm not posting it.
Corrections, especially to my counting, are welcome:
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